Post 9

Kevin, Corrine, Valerie

Sample 1: 
Our theory was that comments needed to be more direct and specific otherwise the comments would confuse the students.

Sample 3: When looking at Sample 3 some of the comments point out strong points. This allows the student to explore ways to edit. These comments were mostly direct with the expectation of a few comments that left room for interpretation.

Sample 4: Need to Read

Sample 5:
This essay was mostly focused on the grammar aspect of comments. Rather than giving ways to improve the essay and give direct comments, the teacher just corrects all the errors. When looking at the first two paragraphs the teacher is just focusing on the grammar and making the changes for the students. However, besides making corrections the teacher also makes very indirect comments such as, "too much repetition, get to your point" & "repetition".  Within our first theory this would work because the comments are to indirect and the student might be confused on how short it is.


Sample 6: 
When reviewing Sample 6 It was noted that the comments given weren't direct. The person who has edited this piece of writing had simply made the proper corrections leaving very little room for the student to improve their writing. However, the comments made were positive but in the long run it doesn't help the students because it's not direct. For example, within the first sentence the editor/teacher makes two corrections. Instead of instructing the writer to go back and fix some mistakes the corrections are already made for them. The second to last paragraph also shows more corrections and rephrasing done by the professor. This doesn't give the student direct comments or allow them to fix them. Instead the student is just getting the answer and being praised. So as for our original theory with the first sample it works as far as indirect comments go but they don't confuse the reader. We can go on further to say that by not giving direct comments the reader doesn't know what they need to fix/change within their writing.


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